Monday, February 25, 2008

Blog Promt 8 - I could have seen it coming...

I don’t even know how all this started. One moment we were all a civilized community striving to live on, now were just a bunch of savage kids playing nothing but a game. All it is to them now is about fun not a care. It led them into killing me just because they were having fun. I don’t understand how it could have gone so badly. It was all because of that Pig incident.
I was in my own place relaxing, just sitting when all of a suddenly the hunters come and kill a pig right in front of me. The stuck it up as if was a totem pole, just a disgrace to the dead pig. I can swear it talked to me. It told me about this. I should have seen it coming. Why didn’t I listen to it? It told me it would be over, I couldn’t run. There was no beastie, the beast was just us. It said either was I was done. There was no way to stop it but it was just such evil power at once. It could have helped but it didn’t, it just stands there now watching everything collapse until everything will die and all we worked for will be destroyed.
What everyone thought was the real beast ended up being nothing but a dead body. The reason for all this madness was still the beast just the wrong one. A dead carcass. That was the reason for my death. Everyone got so caught up with believing on the beast, if they would have only been there at day light. They could have seen there was no beast. And it grew from just a little boys night mare of a snake to a savage god of evil. It shouldn’t have happened. I ran upon it and decided to un attach it from the trees.
Sadly that was my only proof to show them the real beast wasn’t the body but if just flew of after my death making them believe in the beast even more. I ran all the way to jacks party not knowing of the savagery that was going on and that jack had broken off from Ralph. I guess you could have seen it coming to since jack was always looking for attention and for power. He couldn’t just stay leader of the hunters, he had to be chief. I could tell from first glimpse it was bad even if I didn’t have much time down there. They couldn’t even listen to what I said. It was mad. They just randomly attacked. It was quick but the pain was endless.
I can just see it all crumbling down how the lord of the flies said. Now one listens to Ralph but piggy. Jack has gone mad with power. All civilized acts have died like the conch and trying to survive. Its all a game and what about the lilluns. No one will take care of them. I’m not looking forward to what will have, it had bad all over it.

3 comments:

Dimitri's Lord Of The Flies Blog said...

Pretty good Luis I like the detail. This part of the blog stuck out the most to me. "I don’t even know how all this started. One moment we were all a civilized community striving to live on, now were just a bunch of savage kids playing nothing but a game." There are alot of gramtical mistakes in it. Maybe next time you could go over it a few times just to make sure there aren't too many things spelled wrong and all your sentences make sense.

Lexus' Blog said...

you have a good story and i did not see any words misspelled or any thing you did good congrates

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